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Tuesday, 15 October 2019

My holiday writing

In Term 4 we have been writing about our Holiday we had to add some vivid verbs and the w's
here is my writing.

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3 comments:

  1. Zainab18 October 2019 at 09:22

    hello Ellenessa it's your blogger buddy Zainab.
    I really liked the way you layed out your work by putting in paragraphs.I liked it how you said you didn't want to go inside because it was such a nice day outside.Maybe next time you should put a bit more detail into your sentences.
    Bye From Zainab

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  2. Jane Clifford21 October 2019 at 08:20

    Nice work Ellenessa. Very interesting recount. I love the way you have added detail, and made your writing interesting. Great use of vivid verbs too! Ka pai.

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  3. Mrs Cassidy22 October 2019 at 11:45

    Hi Ellenessa.You have used some great words to describe how things 'were like'.I could imagine Austin eating like a cheetah.I think I would eat my ice cream really fast too in case it melted.What chores do you do around home?I remember I used to have to wash the dishes with my brothers.

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